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:iconnotmateo:
I'm going to have fun with this one- I love Critiques. Personally, I love the picture, but you still have a ways to go. Anyways, let's get started!

VISION
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One of the main things for me is character design. I love creating characters, and I love seeing other people's characters. This character is actually inspiring. It's the little things I love about him- His hair shaped like a jazz (basically a mohawk lmao), the blue lines on this arms, legs, face, and chest, and the tail. His excitement to get the dragonhearts seems a little "generic" but all around, still a great character. It's probably worth noting that shorts are the best attire for men v_v

Shit, there I go being gay again....

ORIGINALITY
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Like earlier, this is a great character. Very original. Your story behind it sounds pretty damn cool (I think it needs some work, at first hand. Cliche'd collect something to defeat the boss with the god ego thing doesn't work anymore. Not today.)

Still, I like the character- very cool. Ironically, it reminds me of one of my characters (I'm still developing her, but she's physically alot like this kid)

TECHNIQUE
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Unfortunately, this is where it lacks....

I can see you put a great deal of effort into this, and it shows. Regardless of a little inexperience, you still did really good. Really, really good.

BUT! With that said, you should look up anatomy some. As dumb as it sounds, yaoi teaches you alot xD But that's probably not your thing, so look around deviantART for some good tutorials. I can show you some actually if your interested.

As for your coloring, the colors are well chosen. I like the blue in the colored parts of his skin, and how it's different from the tail.

But your shading is very spotty. IT looks like there is light coming from 100 different directions, spot on. You need to identify where the light comes from, and think about it in a 3D space. It'll help you identify what's where.

Also, look at other's stuff- it'll help you understand. Again, yaoi :D

Nitpicky stuff: the eye is supposed to be looking foward, it looks more like it's looking at us. Toes and fingers are lacking (fingers are jointed)

Also, I love the background- really nicely done with the water. The clouds could be more ....cloudy, and the sun could be more....sunny. But that's it.

Impact
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Not much to say here. He's awesome. Just please, keep improving! I love this character, and I'm highly anticipating your improvement!

I'm gonna watch you, because I want to see more of this <3
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:iconheruoni:
heruoni Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
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:iconnotmateo:
notMateo Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
I take it it's your character lol
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:iconheruoni:
heruoni Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah
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:iconnotmateo:
notMateo Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013
Great character man lol
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:iconheruoni:
heruoni Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thankyou^^
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notMateo Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013
np
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CableDrive Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you for your input, I'm always looking to improve :D And yeah they story does need a lot of work but it is actually more of a character piece, which is why we chose a generic plot line. You are right though in the fact that this does need some work.
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notMateo Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
Well, it's still really great :D
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